IBMC #08: The Nursery Rhyme Challenge

in response to the nursery rhyme challenge-

original rhyme-

Jack and Jill
Went up the hill
To fetch a pail of water
Jack fell down
And broke his crown,
And Jill came tumbling after

****my version****

Jack and Phil

went up a hill

To fetch a pail of water

Jack fell down

and broke his crown,

but Phil broke into laughter.

Phil was mean

his malice unseen,

climbed the hill even faster.

Jack was kind

with a pure mind

but was the victim of the disaster.